请大神们帮我看看这段英文有没有什么错误?Good morning ,boys and girls,ladies and gentlemen,welcome to the XXX primary school.I’m your host XXXX .And I would also like to take this opportunity to wish all present to enjoy his stay i

请大神们帮我看看这段英文有没有什么错误?Good morning ,boys and girls,ladies and gentlemen,welcome to the XXX primary school.I’m your host XXXX .And I would also like to take this opportunity to wish all present to enjoy his stay i
请大神们帮我看看这段英文有没有什么错误?
Good morning ,boys and girls,ladies and gentlemen,welcome to the XXX primary school.I’m your host XXXX .And I would also like to take this opportunity to wish all present to enjoy his stay in our school and to ahve a wonderful time today.
Now,let’s warmly welcome the XXXXX primary school headmaster Mr.X to make a speech.
Thank you for your speech.This activity is a good opportunity for the everyone to display their ideas on organizing successful classroom teaching.And I hope that you,the audience will enjoy this exciting competition and benefit from what you hear.

请大神们帮我看看这段英文有没有什么错误?Good morning ,boys and girls,ladies and gentlemen,welcome to the XXX primary school.I’m your host XXXX .And I would also like to take this opportunity to wish all present to enjoy his stay i
在这段 speech 中,你站在学校,代表学校,所以不需要再用冠词 the in welcome to the XXX primary school.just "welcome to XXX primary school."
And I would also like to 中的 And,也是多余的,不合语法的.因为和前一段话没有关系.
all present 不对；all who are present 是对的,但是又有点儿啰唆.不如说 I wish all of you a pleasant stay and a happy time ...
Now,let’s warmly welcome the XXXXX primary school headmaster,修改为：Mr.xxx,our schoolmaster; 另外,不能要求客人热烈欢迎；这是不礼貌的.所以,Now,please allow me to give you Mr.xxx,our schoolmaster Now,please allow me to introduce Mr.xxx,our schoolmaster ...

总体不错，有一些小错误，如应该把家长放在前面，有的时候冠词可以去掉。我改了一下，你可以对照来看：Good morning , ladies and gentlemen, Girls and Boys, welcome to XXX primary school. I’m the host of XXXX . And I would like to take this opportunity to ...

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总体不错，有一些小错误，如应该把家长放在前面，有的时候冠词可以去掉。我改了一下，你可以对照来看：Good morning , ladies and gentlemen, Girls and Boys, welcome to XXX primary school. I’m the host of XXXX . And I would like to take this opportunity to wish all present to enjoy your stay in our school and to have a wonderful time today.

Now，let’s warmly welcome Mr. X, xxx primary school headmaster to deliver a speech.

Thank you for your speech. This activity is a good opportunity for everyone to present their ideas on organizing successful classroom teaching. And I hope that you, the audience will enjoy this exciting competition and benefit from what you hear.

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