请高手帮我修改一下自我介绍Hello,everybody.My name is ZHANG MING.I come from tong ling foreign language school.My favourite subject is CHIENSE and ENGLISH.I have many hobbies ,I like to play badminton,football ,table tennis and I like wat

请高手帮我修改一下自我介绍Hello,everybody.My name is ZHANG MING.I come from tong ling foreign language school.My favourite subject is CHIENSE and ENGLISH.I have many hobbies ,I like to play badminton,football ,table tennis and I like wat
请高手帮我修改一下自我介绍
Hello,everybody.My name is ZHANG MING.I come from tong ling foreign language school.My favourite subject is CHIENSE and ENGLISH.I have many hobbies ,I like to play badminton,football ,table tennis and I like watching football and basketball match,too.I like reading books ,playing computer games ,listening to music,watch japenses Animation works and so on.My favourite animals is little dog and dolphin,because they looked so nice and cute.I think I'm so polite and helpful.I hope that we can become good friends and happy to spend together three years-were memorable high school life.Thats all ,thank you.

请高手帮我修改一下自我介绍Hello,everybody.My name is ZHANG MING.I come from tong ling foreign language school.My favourite subject is CHIENSE and ENGLISH.I have many hobbies ,I like to play badminton,football ,table tennis and I like wat
首先提醒下拼写错误最最不应该的是CHINESE而不是CHIENSE,这个错误会在任何书面英语考察环节导致你直接出局.虽然你是要做口语表达,但这个错误仍然让我感到很是遗憾.
语法,My favourite subject "is"的后面却跟了两项,单复数使用错误,同样问题存在于My favourite animals is（are） little dog and dolphin这句；watch japenses animation works and so on中应为watching,与前句一致；I hope that we can become good friends中的that在口语表达中完全可以去掉；and happy to spend together three years-were memorable high school life这句很别扭,我想我基本理解你的意思,不妨改成and enjoy the three years memorable high school life together.
其他地方在口语中表达都说的过去,毕竟口语不必过分讲究严格的语法,即时而清楚的表达和交流才是最根本的,否则就有书呆子的嫌疑了,恐怕只有那些爱挑刺的老师们才愿意去显摆那些死板的语法规则.作为一个高中生,能写出以上这样的水平,我觉得已经很不错了,继续努力!

Hello, everybody! My name is Zhang Ming. I come from Tongling Foreign Language School. My favourite subjects are Chinese and English. I have many hobbies. I like to play badminton, football and table ...

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Hello, everybody! My name is Zhang Ming. I come from Tongling Foreign Language School. My favourite subjects are Chinese and English. I have many hobbies. I like to play badminton, football and table tennis. I like watching football and basketball matches, too. I like reading books, playing computer games, listening to music, watching Japenses animation works and so on. My favourite animals are dogs and dolphins, because they look so nice and cute. I think I'm polite and helpful. I hope that we can become good friends and we will be happy to spend three years together. That's all. Thank you!

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Hello,everybody. My name is Zhang Ming. I come from Tongling Foreign Language School. I like the theme Chiense and English. I have a lot of interest, the time when I will play badminton, soccer or pla...

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Hello,everybody. My name is Zhang Ming. I come from Tongling Foreign Language School. I like the theme Chiense and English. I have a lot of interest, the time when I will play badminton, soccer or playing table tennis. Also, I like to watch football and basketball games. I love reading books, playing computer games, and occasionally listen to music or watch animated japenses works, and so on. My favorite animal is a puppy and dolphins, because they can look good and smart. I feel that they are courteous and helpful, and I hope we can become very good friends and together happily spent three years - is an unforgettable high school life. Finished, thank you

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