求帮我把我写的这篇作文的一些不对的语法什么的改正一下.因为这篇作文之后要在全班同学面前大声读出来.所以要保证其语法的正确性一类的.求帮忙看看有没有什么不该用的乱用啊,或者中

求帮我把我写的这篇作文的一些不对的语法什么的改正一下.因为这篇作文之后要在全班同学面前大声读出来.所以要保证其语法的正确性一类的.求帮忙看看有没有什么不该用的乱用啊,或者中
求帮我把我写的这篇作文的一些不对的语法什么的改正一下.
因为这篇作文之后要在全班同学面前大声读出来.所以要保证其语法的正确性一类的.求帮忙看看有没有什么不该用的乱用啊,或者中文式英语在里面.
Dream
We often see thata child has a dream that he is drowned by the river.But in fact he just wetthe bed.Our brains always react some interesting things to tell us whathappened.Just we don’t understand its hint.
And now I willtell a dream about myself.That day,I watched the horror film at midnight.Youcan imagine how terrifying I felt at that time.Then I fell asleep.I rememberedI became a ghost wandering in the street.Everyone couldn’t see me.I’m soscary that I began to do some pranks to strangers.Just like break their cups,or take their handbag.Then I dreamed that someone called the priest to killme.The priest reading the bible,I felt uncomfortable and wanted to escape.WhenI felt the pain,I woke up.Then I found myself under the bed.
In China,a mancalled “zhouggong” can explain our dreams.Most people likes to ask him.So doI.But I get the answer that this dream imply that I can make a fortune.It’s soridiculous that I can’t believe it.Until now,I still don’t understand what thisdream try to tell me.I guess,it just show the fear that I own.I would ratherthis is my unconscious mind to tell me I will be a ghost.This is my dream.If youhave a better explanation,please tell me.

求帮我把我写的这篇作文的一些不对的语法什么的改正一下.因为这篇作文之后要在全班同学面前大声读出来.所以要保证其语法的正确性一类的.求帮忙看看有没有什么不该用的乱用啊,或者中
先说第一句：Sometimes a child may get a dream in which he is drowning in a river.But the reality is that he is just going through bed-wetting.这一句里面你原本用的be drowned表示“已经淹死了",但我认为你想表达的应该是“溺水”.也不是被河淹死了,所以不用by,而用in,意思变为”在河里溺水了“,这应该是你想表达的吧?尿床也不对.还有句式也很混乱,你想引出一种现象直接描述即可,We often see既不合适也不必要,显得累赘.后面不合适的太多了,简要说说：Our brains always react some interesting things to tell us what happened没有这个句式,而且时态混乱,Just we don’t understand its hint.,just放在we后面才对.再后面就没法说了,说明显的几个the horror film改为a horror film how terrified I felt,I fell asleep改为I fall asleep break their cups,or take their handbag里面动词变为ing形式 the priest变为a priest reading改为read bible首字母大写,likes 改为like,后面还有类似第三人称单数错误与时态混乱,自己改改吧.